More Attempts at Warbling!

shando

Hi Dudes,

Here's the meat & bones of my latest idea, with more of my karaoke style warbling. Any comments/criticisms/advice will be much appreciated as usual.

http://www.digitech.com/soundcomm/patches/GNX4/GettinOlder.mp3

TY

shando

ACWild

Hey man, that's a cool song with a nice buildup. 8) I think the highlight of this song is the vocals though, and it seems there's a lot of sections where the singing is missing.
The mix is a bit unbalanced, but I'm not sure if it's an effect you were trying to achieve. :?: Specifically, there's a lead guitar melody that's really buried in the mix volume-wise. It's a cool line that adds variety to the song.
The arpeggiated guitar is the most dominant. Since it's a repetitive rhythm, you might want to bring it down to let the vocals in the forefront. Also, the vocals can use some treble to cut through the mix better.
Drum levels are low too, but you may have wanted the mix like that. :?:
I suppose this looks like a lot of critiqueing, but I really enjoyed your song.
JMHO on the mixing/mastering.

partch

Very nice Shando!! i liked the song!! I think the Vocals could come up some though!! There is a few spots I can't realy hear the words well. My preference would be to swap the guitars level's. Have the acoustic up front with the vocals. That electric guitar that runs all the way thru down some. The solos are nice tone choice of notes etc.. Overall very nice Are you going to take this one farther?? It has merit.

God Bless Shando!!
Partch

WOGS858

wow you have a good voice
definetly lookin forward to the remix also you shuold post the words

shredd

Yo Shando, great tune - ready for that \"polished\" take. I like the gradual intro of instruments. Very good feel and tempo and build up. Maybe a liiiiitle less phaser on the electric rythm part, Definitely spike the vocals a bit, they're really good....if I could sing that well, I WOULD go to karaoke and meet women by impressin gthem with my Barry Manilow covers! Lead volume is bit overwhelming, which I'm very aware of since I seem to do it all the time. But really, killer tune - do a \"master\" take, and post the lyrics!

Mike B

Shando, very effective opening with the guitar by itself and then bringing in the drums. Are you using a phase shift or chorus and a little delay?

I liked how the heavy guitar plays against the clean guitar too.

I am inclined to agree with Partch and AC, about the clarity of the vocals. Couple of times I had a hard time understanding the lyric, like the guitar washed out the rest of the lyric, especially when when you get to the line \"everyday feels the same as the days go by\" Seems like \"as the days go by\" is pushed back or swamped by the phased guitar. Good song no offense meant, just my 2 cents worth.

I'm doing 56 hours this week at work and everyday just seems the same. Thanks for posting your song

P.G.Shadow

Shando 8) , That was a good job.The vocals were good,but like Mike B said they do get washed out in spots.
I think you got a real keeper there if you fix a few thing, and add some more words. Right on!!! 8)

Keep Rock'in P.G.

shando

Hi Dudes,

Thanks for all the comments etc. Yeah Mike, I'm using phaser and delay on the arrpegiated part. This is the kinda stuff I find really useful. I will drop the arppegiated part down, add some treble to the vocals and increase the volume on the drums. This was all mixed in a very short amount of time so that I could get some ideas and to see where I can take it. By the time I finish it will probably sound completely different. I never post completed stuff as I refuse to give up any rights to it. I still have to put my own real drumming on it too instead of the basic canned drums from the GNX. In fact, thinking about it now I may even re-do the vocals too as they were only a 3rd take. I still need the confidence in my own singing to put them right up front and clear. Here's the lyrics for those that asked:

Time is getting on, our lives are getting shorter every day
Another years gone by, I don't know how much more I can take
Every day, just feels the same
As the days go by
Every day just feels the same
As the days go by

So far this is all I have lyrically . I tend to only get far as a verse or two with songs before I move on to something else. But the good thing is I will be off to another country very soon for 6 months (with a 2 week break in between if I can fit it in) through work and wont be able to take my guitar so I will expect to come home with more lyrics than you can shake a big stick at :!:

Thanks again for the input guys.

TY

shando

ACWild

Have fun on the trip!
As far as confidence in vocals, sing louder and bring it up in the mix. You sing very well.
The GNX drums are actually usable, but you either need to run CAL in Sonar or record each drums on separate tracks. This way, you can eq, pan, and adjust the volumes correctly. The cymbals are a bit fizzy though.
If you don't add vocals, you can adjust the song accordingly by shortening some parts. This would balance the song better (only if you don't add the vocals).
Too bad you won't post the final. I think it's gonna sound great. 8)

P.G.Shadow

I agree, your voice has taken a BIG jump up since some of the last vocals we've heard from you. What ever your doing in that aspect, keep doing it.
Have fun on you workation, and stay away from the bad girls

Keep Rock'in P.G.

Tal Rules

I like the entire concept of the piece. It's slow build up to the mellow groove.. The one minute of silence at the end was a little awkward but overall I dug it..
See Ya,
Tal.. 8)

0Dannyboy

What a kool vibe to this tune :!: its got a nice tempo to it. laid back and I really like the feel of your vocals. You are definatley kicking it up a notch these days. as for your vox...pushem up a bit in the mix you sound great.